Draft Feedback- CONCLUSION!

After gathering all the information in from my class-mates and my teachers, i have decided to take a few actions to improve my overall grade.
Firstly, i am going to remove all of the skateboarding footage, as i now agree that there is no link between the band performance. Although my original idea resolved around the skateboarding, it is now central to the band performance and the mise-en-scene.
I will replace the skateboarding with footage including the band and the original room filled up with balloons! LETS SEE IF IT WORKS!!
Thanks to everyone for my feedback!!

Mr Ford & Mr Nicolle Draft Feedback

• Mise en scene (interior) is excellent. Great attention to detail.
• Exterior shots are less effective- no real link to interiors. The lights do look good though.
• Stop motion worked very well- it is used to good effect.
• Lip syncing is good- a few lapses but that doesn't detract a great deal.
• Props are used with real skill.
• The cards with the lyrics on should have been used more often than once, this is a great idea.
• Towards the end of the track the drummer needs to hit the drums with more force.
• Nice touch at the end with the director entering the frame.

-Think about removing the skateboarding imagery.

-Do you have extra footage to fill the gaps.

Draft Feedback- Dani

BABE!

Draft Feedback- Emma

Try make the clips brighter by changing the contrast.
I think when Joe is doing the drumming might be a little bit out of time.
Music fits well with the image of the boys.
Looks fun, not boring to watch.

Draft Feedback- Louise

• I like the blurry to focused shots
• Make sure all of the band go for it in the lip syncing, one of them mumbles a bit
• Like he skateboarding shots
• Good quality
• At one point 2 have chequered shirts, 2 don't is that on purpose or co-ordinated?
• The drumming etc is spot on time
• Like the props too
• Like the free hand shots in the outdoor bits rather than using a tripod
• As sir said, like to the outdoor and indoor scenes
• Is a very good video though, impressed!

Draft Feedback- Leonie

Love the shot underneath skateboard.
Lip syncing and instruments look really good.
Think it would be more effective if Jake didn't look at his mates when there is the mid shot of the four of them, but it still somehow works.
Costumes and setting work well.
Love the skating scenes.
Didn't know if i missed it, but when i watched it before i think there was a piece of paper that said 'love' on it before the shot of the graffiti 'love', i really liked that so keep it in!

Draft Feedback- Kam

• Beginning drags on a little
• Lip syncing off at times
• Really good
• Looks really effective
• Costumes look good
• Band Fits well
• Stop motion looks really good

Draft Feedback- Maz

• Joe's lip syncing is really good
• Realistic- looks like they were playing the instruments
• Good choice of actors
• Very good mise en scene
• Sometimes doesn't look like they are properly lip syncing
• Goos skating shots

Draft Feedback- Dan

• Good lip syncing 
• Looks like they're playing the instruments
• Good, interesting shots of skateboarding
• Good choice of costume
• Good choice of actors
• Mise en scene is just right
• Good use of location
• Needs a link between skateboarding and performance
• Good use of one location
• Skateboarding not really necessary, although its good

Draft Feedback- Becky

I like how you have taken image of what they are wearing by having them change tops. This shows good presentation of the band image.
I love the image of the skating with the coloured lanterns, it is very atmospheric.

Draft Feedback- Katie

• Absolutely amazing!
• Original idea, works & professional look
• Actors suit genre
• Editing looks good
• Small bit of the lip syncing out of time, that was it. (Jake & Harvey)
• Setting really good & effective
• Just all round perfect work jack, Well done! :)

Draft Feedback- Erica

When dan plays the keyboard, sign underneath cannot be seen.
Make sure jake knows the lyrics!
AWESOME!